hi everyone! this is my very first fanfic and i hope u will lik it! if u have any advice or ideas for new chapters that will be great. but there is one thing i need though. i need a villian and possibly hench men. if u can help me with that, that will be fantastic. of course i will pick the villain and possiby henchmen later. hope u will like it!
Heyyy! It's me, Batskee. I just wanted to say that I love your story! I've started from the beginning and I'm up to chapter 33!
I really love it and I wanted to post this because I can't contain myself anymore.
Silvermist: Gee. Zira or as she was known in the orphanage, Jeina, seems pretty bad!
Me: I'm surprised she forgot about the wolf. Or maybe she's just playing dumb...
Silvermist: You never know.
Me: Anyway, I really love it! And I shall catch up really soon! Promise!
haha, LOL. Getting it published = Awesome. I'd love to be an author! Thank you! I'd love to put in Fanfiction.net, but my dad says that nick.com is much safer. Well it is true, so I respect that.
@ ?
aww! Thanks! That means a lot! Woah! Another person saying my story should be published! That's insanely awesome! If one more person says that, I think i'm going to explode! (in the inside with great joy) Oh, don't worry about it. i'm totally there. School, work, chores, extra.
@ Jumpinlove
Shucks! you know what? For my yearbook, there's this category thing and everyone has to pick which person belongs to which. for me, I got chosen as Best Author! Totally crazy, right?! Anyway, thank you! Also thank you for reading my story! If there was a best buddy list here on nick, you would be one of them. You are awesome!
Me: well it's the truth!!! U are an amazing author and everyone here just love ur story!!!! U are a talented author with such a way with words in ur story!!! Like if i like something i have thanks the person for created it right?! And so i thank u for this awesome story!!!!
OMg!! i seriously love this story! and balah is right,you should get this published. Sorry, I took so long to post/comment or review, I was a little busy with school, and all
thanks for giving me homework on my weekend!LOL. The good news is that i like it,LOL. Just saying u could get it published if u become an author or if u want to just do it and you are not an author.i hope u send the next chap. soon,i am getting curious
Tigress was coming back with all the bags. She was so glad that her friend is alright. After he 'died' from the incident, Tigress was devasted. Now, it was like a sunshine shone in her heart. But one thing remained though. Jeia. Frustrated and not wanting a headache, she shook it out of her head. She can't have this. Not now, later. Finally, for what seemed forever, she arrived. But then she remembered she didn't put the scroll away. She hid it in her bag and then continued to enter camp. She exited the trees and saw the others around the fire. Po heard rustling nearby and turned to see what made it. His face was filled with happiness when he saw Tigress coming. Then he saw that she having trouble with all of the luggage she carried and went up to help her.
"Here." Po offered, holding half of the bags.
Tigress nodded a thank you. She really didn't want to talk to Po after the little 'misunderstanding'.
"So what happened back there?" Po asked.
Tigress put the bags down near the others first before doing anything. Po also put down the bags next to her. He could see something is bothering her. Maybe he should talk to her later. Tigress didn't dare to look at him and instead stared at the ground. She really didn't want to talk to them, especially Po. She slowly turned to look at the furious four, all expecting an answer. Viper most of all. She could clearly see through her eyes something's up.
With a concerned look, Viper mouthed to her, 'What's wrong?'
Tigress quickly stared at the ground again. Figuring she didn't have a choice, she spoke, not even looking at them as she did.
"Oh just a bandit, nothing serious. I saw that he had swords so I took those from him." Tigress said, placing the two swords in her tent instead of the weapon's pile.
Po found it suspicious not putting the swords in the pile, but decided that she might have had a long day so he let it aside. As she went back to look for her bag in the pile, Po was curious.
"Where's the bandit?" Po asked.
"He was able to get away. He made me blind with dust and when I got sight again, he was gone." Tigress lied, realizing she was doing it a lot.
As the others saw Tigress looking for her bag, they figured they should too. Once they found theirs, they left to their tent. Lastly, Tigress found both of hers. She decided she didn't need the bamboo backpack anymore, so she will use it for holding all the food. She started packing the groceries until Po showed back up.
"What's that?" Po asked, pointing to the bamboo backpack.
"Just a backpack I made from bamboo this morning. I thought we might need an extra carrier." Tigress lied again, still packing the food.
"Ok so is that the one you brought on your mission when you left the Jade Palace?" Po asked, now pointing to the big soft brown bag.
"Yeah, it is." Tigress said.
"Did you like what I put in there?" Po said, a smile appearing.
Tigress halted in packing the food and looked at Po. She gave a curious face and turned to the bag. "Actually, I don't remember anything and I didn't look in it yet. I guess i'll look now." Tigress said, heading to the bag.
She kneeled down and opened her bag. She found her tent, clothes, food, water, tools. But, surprisingly, she found figurines of her and Po too. Then there was a note attached that said, 'So you don't get lonely. Be careful. See ya later. Your best friend, Po.' Tigress can see Po really cares about her. She stood up and turned to him, who was smiling and waiting for a response. Forgeting about the 'misunderstanding', she did the unthinkable.
"That was very thoughtful of you, Po." Tigress said and gave a hug. "Thank you."
Realizing what she was doing, she let go. Without looking at him, she picked up her bag and left into the tent. Po was so stunned that he froze. Viper eventually came out of her tent and saw Po in his frozen state. She waved her tail in front of him. Nothing. So she slapped him and Po woke up as he gave an 'oww!'.
Rubbing his cheek, Po said, "Thanks."
"Don't mention it. Now, what happened?" Viper asked.
"Tigress hugged me." Po said, amazed and shocked. "That's twice now in this trip."
Viper could notice that Tigress is getting very friendly with Po, as if she only trusts him.
'This is a good sign of romance.' Viper thought, as she smiled.
Then, Viper made an idea of how Po and Tigress can be together.
"Hey, Po? How about you go talk to Tigress? I think she can use the company." Viper said and blinked at Po.
Po understood what Viper meant and said, "Sure. She seems stressed out."
He blinked back and headed to the tent. Also because something is going on with Tigress. He has to know what's going on. There's just something not right. He just couldn't put his paw to it. He will have to talk to Tigress. He entered the tent.
@Lola595
Aww, Thank you! *creepy voice* But that's just the beginning.... *evil laugh* lol jk......kinda.
@Jumpinlove
* * hehe, you're really awesome with the comments.
@Balah
Ohhhh! ok I was just making sure. *gasps* That would be sooo awesome! My story, published! *gasps louder* In dvd! Thats epic!!! *squeals* That is the best idea ever! Too bad I can't do that. Dont know how. LOL, not like I should know. Soooo awesome though.
@everyone
If you like or love my story, please express your feelings in telling me what you're favorite part or chapter is! The more words, the merrier I would be! LOL, it's like I'm giving you homework. Thank you! Next Chapter posted in a bit!
@tigress----the fan-fic is getting really good,i just read the 2 chapters about Delgado,u should get this story published!(laughs)........me:hey tigress did u know a story got published about u and the authors name is tigress?tigress;that is impossible,no one knows me!Po:hey guys,have you heard of the author tigress?she made a book called kung fu power drain!me;i know right,and it is coming to dvd!tigress:maybe people do make storys about me......(giggles).....by the way i found out about the 2 people called balah,i am both.it is just that when i log in,it comes out in big prints.
Just as the wolf thought, Tigress stopped. He smiled and closed his eyes, full of pride. But, when he opened them, he saw Tigress coming straight at him. He didn't have time to move. She grabbed his throat and slammed it against a bamboo tree with force. Tigress snarled as she was choking him.
"HOW DO YOU KNOW THAT?!" Tigress screamed angrily.
Through gasps, the wolf said, "I s-saved you-from her-when she a-attacked-you-in the or-orphanage."
Tigress immediately dropped him in surprise as he immediately took in a big breath. He coughed a couple of times while Tigress just stared at him with wide eyes.
"It's me, Delgado." the wolf said, rubbing his throat. Then he whispered, "Man, you have a grip."
Tigress went to anger and demanded, "Prove it!"
He weakly stood up, turned around, and lifted his shirt off. There on his back was 4 straight aligned cuts that are now permanent scars. This was the scratch mark of Jeia of when Delgado saved her. Tigress took it all in. She believes him now. Delgado puts his shirt back on and turned around to face her. Her expression was mixed with shock, happiness, and surprise.
"Delgado," Tigress said as she hugged him, "I thought Jeia defeated you."
"Don't worry, i'm fine now." Delgado said and separated their hugs. "I'm just glad Jeia doesn't know that i'm ...me or I would have been dead by now."
"How did you know Zira was Jeia?" Tigress asked.
Delgado responded, "Well, when we were talking about the new plan this morning and blah blah blah, she said that you and her had history together. That's when i realized she was talking about you and that she is-"
"Jeia, yeah. Me too. I just realized it this morning." Tigress said.
After saying 'morning', she wondered what time it could be. Tigress looked up and saw that it was night. Oh no! Her friends! They must be worried!
"I gotta go! The others must be worried! Bye! I'll miss you!" Tigress said then started taking off with all the stuff.
"Wait!" Delgado shouted.
Tigress stopped and turned around to look at the canine.
"Are you going to tell your friends about you and Jeia?" Delgado asked.
"Delgado, you know I can't do that. I can only trust you." Tigress said.
"Tigress, you're going to have to face it. Or they will find out in their own. At least tell one of them."
Tigress looked at the ground for a while and finally said sadly, "Ok, I'll do it."
"Oh and remember, be careful." Delgado said.
"I will." Tigress said.
Just when she took another step toward camp, she stepped on metal. She looked down to see Delgado's swords. She picked it up and passed it to Delgado, but he denied.
"Keep it. You need it more than I do." Delgado said with a smile.
Tigress said, "Are you sure?"
Delgado responded, "Positive. We have many weapons back at the hideout."
Tigress smirked and said, "Thank you"
They both hugged each other again then went their separated ways.
@balah
Thanks! oh and i was just making sure. i was confused. anyway im glad your my fan! Im 100 percent sure you'll LOVE kung fu panda 2! see ya!
@everyone
next chapter will be posted a bit later today!
@tigress-------------yeah,i am the same person,but i don't know anything about another person named balah. Is it someone with a profile named balah?because that is not possible,anyways,your fan-fic is still great!and i will watch kung fu panda 2.i am sure it is amazing.see u soon!
@Lola595
Aww! That's too kind! I missed you too!
@adaline1
thanks! I'm glad that you like the story too!
@Jumpinlove
Yay! That's too kind! the next chapter is posted today!
@KFPDW
hmm, i guess i can give you a few tips. I can see you have the same problem i had in being new here kinda.
-The ? marks that are actually supposed to be " or ' when posting.
Yeah it must be frustrating. well here's the thing. i'm guessing you are using microsoft, am i correct? well don't use that. My good friend Jumpinlove told me what to really use. Wordpad. it's a program in the computer. You just have to download it. the reason is that the " or ' in microsoft is curved. (which makes nick.com turn it into ?) In wordpad, it's straight so it wont turn into ?.
Ok, that's one thing. here's another.
what i see is that the 'lines' from the characters is also mixed with the narration. well, in that way, some people don't find that attractive. Try to do them separated, like this:
Everyone arrived at the village. But the village was full of villagers buying and selling needs and goodies. Tigress had to think of a plan.
"Ok everybody. I have a plan. We need to get to the mountains to find and stop Jeia." Tigress said.
"Don't you mean Zira?" Mantis asked.
Tigress felt like she went white. She can't let them know yet about Jeia. Not yet. So she came up with something to cover it.
"Yes! Yes, I mean. I just got mixed up with the name." Tigress said, a bit quickly.
Tigress was smiling and laughed nervously. They all looked at her with suspicious faces, which made Tigress a little more nervous. Then she went serious.
See how the narration and the talking are separated? That's what i like.
I guess that's a good few tips. Anyway, Good luck on your story!
@BALAH
Hey there! Thank you so much for the comment!*gasps* You think i'm as smart as Tigress?!?! that is sooo flattering! *gasps again* you've never seen kung fu panda 2?!?! (actually, there's no 3 or 4) Well, i hope you can see it soon because it's awesome! Actually, in Tigress' childhood she was in the orphanage, but i made it a behind-the-scenes kind of thing with making a new character, Zira (real name is Jeia). Umm, well i can't tell you how many chapters are left, but i can tell you this. It will be VERY long! Also i want to ask you something. I'm confused. There are two balahs and i don't know if you're the same person or not.
1 balah
2 BALAH (you)
Judging by the same names you might be the same person. if not, well then i'm glad you love my story! Thanks for reading!
Tigress ran quickly to the thief and skidded to a stop when he was close. She hid behind a bush and decided to watch what he was doing. From what she saw, the wolf was doing ...nothing. Just leaning on a bamboo tree. Then, Tigress examined the wolf and could clearly see it was a large golden brown wolf, just as tall as her.
'Judging that he's different than other wolves are supposed to be, he might be the leader of the wolves of Jeia.' Tigress assumed in thought.
Then Tigress noticed the wolf was looking at her with a shocked expression.
"It is you, Tigress. I thought Zira meant another animal." The wolf whispered shockingly.
'So he is a helper of hers!' Tigress thought angrily.
Since she was spotted, Tigress stood up and moved out the bush, coming a bit closer to him.
"Who are you and how did you know my name?" Tigress demanded.
The wolf decided to have fun and replied, "Why are you here and why do you look bad?" Gestering to Tigress' dirty clothes and messed up fur.
Seeing that he's trying to change the subject, Tigress said, "You didn't answer my question."
"You didn't answer mine." The wolf answered immediately, smiling at the feline.
Tigress got suspicious with the wolf immediately. Tigress thought that he might be stalling her for a trap. That thought triggered Tigress and now she was on alert. Anything can happen. There might be wolves all around her. Or wolves ready to attack Po back at camp! With all those thoughts she had, she was worried. She would have to take out this wolf so the others would surrender, even if they're here or not. She went in to attack him, until he stopped her.
"Wait! Before you attack me," The wolf said, reaching behind him and then threw all the backpacks in front of the feline. "just hear me out."
Tigress stared at the backpacks and then to him, an expressionless look on her.
'Did he steal the backpacks just to get me here and hear him talk? Very unlikely. But I could get something out of him about Jeia. Might as well listen.' Tigress thought.
"What do you want?" Tigress finally said coldly.
"Look. I can't stand Zira. She forced me and my friends to work for her. Trust me. She treatened if we don't help her, she would kill our village. It's filled with innocent lives. We didn't want this to happen in the first place. We want her stopped." the wolf said.
"First of all, I don't believe you. Second, didn't you think we were going to stop her anyway?" Tigress said.
"You have every right to not believe me. But if we don't do what she says, she'll kill all of us. She will too! We are just extras who does the work for her. She can easily do what all of us can do together, like defeat you guys. That's why we are following orders from her. Trust me, she can take all of you down in a heartbeat. Remember when she took down 4 of your buddies? She defeated them with ease. Look, I came here to help you and your friends to safety and to defeat Zira." The wolf said.
"How?" Tigress shouted, irritated with the wolf and obviously still not believing him.
"With this." The wolf said and reached for his back.
Tigress growled at him as soon as he did that. The wolf immediately lifted his hands up in the air, scared of her sudden growl.
"What?!" The wolf asked worried.
With Tigress' teeth bared and ears flattened against her head, she said, "Drop all your weapons!"
The wolf could see she didn't trust him yet. So he dropped the two swords he had in his pocket. Tigress could clearly see that was all the weapons he had, but wasn't satisfied. The wolf raised a brow and sighed. He used his foot to slide the weapons in front of Tigress. Tigress picked up the weapons and threw it behind her.
"Turn around." Tigress demanded.
The wolf did as told, hands still in the air. Tigress saw what he was reaching for in the first place. A scroll. Tigress walked over to him with caution and took the scroll. She read it. It was Jeia's plan.
The wolf put down his arms, turned around to face her and said, "Look. The one you had in your backpack is old. She made a new one since the other was flawed. Keep it. It's yours. I copied it from the real one. Every single word. If you know this, I thought you would think of a plan that would stop her. I will try to do anything to help while she is preparing."
Closing the scroll, Tigress said suspiciously, "How do I know you're not setting me up?"
The wolf opened his mouth to speak, but said nothing for he had no proof. He closed his jaw and looked at the ground. Then, Tigress started to turn around to leave.
"That's what I thought." Tigress said and threw the scroll to the ground.
She walked away to her friends with the backpacks. She let him go for now, but later, he wouldn't stand a chance. Then, in the middle of despair, the wolf remembered something. It wasn't proof, but it might get her attention.
i like the way you think as smart as tigress and what she would do like if she should tell them about Jeia. Oh and welcome back!this is going to be a long fan-fic and i love to read!which is also 1 of the reasons i like the fan-fic.the truth is,i have never seen kung fu panda 2,3,or 4.only 1 and legends of awesomeness.and so i am not sure if that is what really happened at the orphanage where tigress was,anyways i like it if that is what really happened or not!i loooooove this fan-fic!good luck with the next chapters,how many chapters are there left?
Welcome Back Tigress714,
I don't suppose you can give me some story advice, I am having trouble with my fanfic and the beginning chapters. I have started afresh and create my own storylines and such. (The retake on LOA Series 2 by the was just a outloud brainstorm, I was never going to to do that). Like I said before I am new at this and I am not sure if people like my story. I have a writer's block and since you are good at this and poeple like your fanfic, I don't suppose you can give me a few pointers please???