My new fanfic. Enjoy! Here goes...
Chapter 1 (Sorry about any glitches with the question marks!)
Jade slammed the car door closed and stormed into school. "Hey, Jade! I was wondering about-"
"Buzz off, Vega." Jade replied flatly, and kept walking. "I was wondering about the new play? I heard the auditions were soon? when are they?? Tori continued. Sigh. ?They?re this Friday after school. Now leave.? Jade responded, and was just about to enter Sikowitz?s classroom when Sikowitz himself stopped her. ?Jade?? he started. ?Can you do me a favor??
?No.?
?You have to.?
?Ugh, fine. What do you want??
?I need you to help a new girl around school. She?s already in the classroom, but here?s her schedule and her school photo from last year so you know what she looks like. She?s in all the same classes as you. Just help her around, will you?? He handed Jade a folded piece of paper and ran back into the room. Sighing, she sat down and unfolded the paper. Then she gasped. That face was familiar. She remembered now. The same curly blonde hair. The sparkling blue eyes. The signature sloping nose. Oh, yes, she remembered it well now. The arguments. The jealousy. The betrayal.
This was the face of her worst enemy. -Faith-
Review:
Ideas? Im seriously in love with the idea of this fanfic. It's so fulled with drama! You want fanfics that make people hooked to the story. You have that. 10 stars!
Grammer? Perfect. You are using many describing words which helps people feel inside the story or they can picture it in their mind clearly. Use more of that
Realistic? Yes. In fact, make in 4th grade i had an enemy named Shay and she tried to get revenge on me. Long story, lol! Anyway, it is very realistic, since this can happen to people in real life. Great for a fanfic, but a little fiction is good too. Use some of that.
Details? Like i said on Grammer, it's super detailed. 10 stars!
My Advice? Well, like i said on your other fanfic, your not posting chapters. You havent posted your last chapter in a few months. Of course, im not making you write a chapter but you know what i mean. You lose people when you dont write a chapter in awhile.
Otherwise, this fanfic is great. Your an excellent writer, Faith!
Chapter 16
Abby's head spun. Of course, she had forgotten about that one day a long, long
time ago, when she had considered the possibility of being nice to Jade.
She regretted that now.
"I hope she fails." she muttered angrily.
"Guys, we're still in class! Abby, start with W!" Cami's slightly harsh voice
broke her out of her daydream.
"Wait, what were we talking about?" Abby asked, not even meaning to start her
sentence that way.
"Xylophones... weren't the subject, anyways." Beck strained to find a sentence
with the letter X.
"You know, we are the last two here." Abby tapped her chin.
"Zebras... weren't the subject either." Again, Beck struggled for a word.
"Absolutely right!" Abby exclaimed.
"But... what do we do now?" Beck asked her.
"Come on, you should know what..." said Abby.
"Don't really know." Beck replied.
"Even Jade would know." Abby laughed.
"Forget Jade, it's just us." said Beck.
"Get on with it." said Abby, shoving his shoulder.
"How about I tell you a secret?" Beck's voice dropped to a whisper.
"I'd like that." Abby straightened up and leaned in to listen.
"Just give me a minute." said Beck.
"Kangaroos are faster than you, unless you hurry up!" Abby snorted impatiently.
"Listen, I..." Beck stuttered.
"Maybe I can help you." Abby shrugged.
"No, I got it." Beck turned away.
"This is boring!" said a voice. Definetly Meagan's. "Get on with this!"
"Okay, well, what is it?" Abby asked.
"Please... go out with me on Saturday?" Beck said shyly.
"Quite nice of you, and of course I'll go!" Abby reached out to give Beck a hug. A
nice one. Meagan rolled her eyes.
"Right, then..." Beck blushed.
"So, now..." Abby also blushed.
"To Nozu? The sushi place?"
"Underappreciated restaurant it is, but okay." said Abby.
"Very nice." laughed Beck.
"What about a place I know?" Abby grinned.
"Xylophones are my favorite music, so will that music be playing?" said Beck.
"You're ridiculous! It's a nice restaurant that my aunt owns!" Abby nudged him
happily. She didn't care what Megan thought of her or Beck or anyone now.
"Zillion, million yes!" Beck laughed again.
"A ridiulous thing to say." said Abby.
"And class is over!" Cami cut into their talking. "Nice job guys!" Just after she
finished, the bell rang. The class left, chatting and even gossiping about what
had unfolded in front of their eyes during class.
Meagan brushed past Abby, knocking her aside. "You're dead, Crabby." she sneered.
"Oh, man." Abby muttered, after she had finished wobbling from the shove.
"It's okay, she's just mean like that." Beck grabbed her to steady her. But Abby was already worried. Now she had two people to be afraid of, Jade and Meagan. And she had no idea why.
How did you guys like that? It was mainly just a "filler" chapter, and it didn't have too much exciting information and stuff, but... -Faith-
Chapter 17
Jade felt like she was about to explode from nervousness.
She always dreamed about her big break, but never imagined she would feel like this. Anxious to the point of bursting, wringing her hands, broken out in a nervous sweat. She suffered in silence until Darcey, the extras coordinator, handed her a script.
"You ready?" she asked softly, with a sympathetic look in her eye. "Hey, you'll do great. It'll be fine."
"I guess." Jade replied shakily.
"And... action!" shouted Mr. Belmonte.
"'Bethany, wait!'" Darcey read from the script in a fake-worried voice. "'Please, come back!'"
"'No!'" Jade cried. "'Not after what you did to me!'"
"'It was an accident! I didn't mean to!'" said Darcey.
"'It was not. And we both know it.'" Jade glared at her feet, as per instructions by the script.
"'Really, it was! I promise!'" Darcey protested in a weak voice.
Jade held up her hand, as it said in the script, and tried to force as much emotion as she could. "'Save your breath. Your chance is already gone.'" And she turned away, choking out a surprisingly realistic sob as she did. She could really relate to this character.
The entire panel broke out in enthusiastic applause.
"The best I've seen yet! Congratulations, Miss West!" Mr. Belmonte shook her hand, then Brian and Darcey did the same. "Through that door, if you please." He gestured towards another door to their right. She stepped through into a cramped room filled with about fourteen or so girls, all wringing their hands nervously. She found Michelle in the room as soon as she entered. The two hugged and shrieked for joy.
"This is amazing! We're both through!" Michelle squealed happily. But Jade suddenly stopped. "What's wrong?" asked Michelle warily.
Jade grimaced. "You know there's only one part, right?" she said. The smile immediately vanished from Michelle's face.
"I hope you get it," she said seriously. "You deserve it."
"No, you do." Jade told her. "You'd be great for it.
They had just started to argue lightly when a tall, thin, model-like girl with jet-black hair and almond shaped eyes tapped Jade on the shoulder.
"Hey, guys, you better stop arguing, because neither of you are going to get it." she snapped. "The name's Angela Lee. Call me Angie. You'll never stand a chance." she assured them confidently.
"Well, we're about to find out." said Jade wearily, as Brian, Darcey, and Mr. Belmonte entered the room, which silenced immediately.
"Let me just say, you all were amazing!" said Brian kindly. "But there was only one main part." At that part, the black-haired girl, Angie, smirked at them. "Congratulations to you all for making it this far. But the part definitely had to go to..."
Sorry for the short chapter. By the way, there's a huge twist on who gets the part that you guys will definitely not expect! Hope you guys like this chapter! -Faith-
Chapter 16
"I thought this was a private interview?" Jade exclaimed. "Why are all these people here?"
"I guess Mr. Belmonte must have, ah... changed his mind." Mr. Feldings said calmly. "It won't be a long wait."
"It won't be?" Jade muttered, but sat down anyways next to a short girl with wispy blonde hair and light blue eyes. She reminded Jade of a blonde mouse.
"No, Ally!" the girl whispered into her phone. "I'm sorry, okay? I'm taking a chance! It's more important than that thing, anyways!" She sniffled. "Please?... Okay, then. Fine. Have it your way." She hung up angrily.
"I know how you feel," Jade told her. "Same thing happened to me awhile ago."
"Really?" the girl asked. "By the way, I'm Michelle."
"Jade." Jade stuck out her hand, and Michelle shook it. "And you'll find that if she doesn't support you, she's not a good friend."
"Yeah, that's true. Thanks." Michelle smiled faintly.
A tall man with bright red hair wearing a black t-shirt was standing by an office door holding a clipboard. He said something, and a short girl with dark hair stood up. Five minutes later, she walked out looking disappointed. Jade realized he was calling names.
"Tailor, Carolyn!" he called. A girl with dark blonde hair stood nervously and shuffled into the office.
"So where do you go to school?" Jade asked Michelle. Both of them had bored looks on their faces.
"Oh, Hollywood Arts." Michelle replied.
"No way! Me too!" Jade grinned.
Michelle grinned back. "I'm there for music and acting. Not much of a singer. You?"
"Acting and singing." said Jade. "So, do you have Sikowitz?"
"I do. Isn't he so crazy?"
"I know right? I mean, coconuts? Seriously?"
Michelle laughed. "So when do you have him?"
"First thing in the morning." Jade answered. "You?"
"Right before we leave."
"Cool." said Jade. "You might know Andre Harris. He does some music stuff too."
"Oh, yeah, I know him!" Michelle nodded. "He's in my Music and Song-writing classes." She looked up as the man called "Wade, Hadley."
"I'm next." she said. And sure enough, a few minutes later, the man called "Wagner, Michelle."
"Good luck!" Jade said.
"Thanks, you too!" Michelle smiled. "See you at school."
As the time ticked on, Jade sat in silence, processing the new information. Now that she thought about it, she has seen Michelle walking in the halls and at her locker when school ended.
She jumped as she heard her name being called.
"Is there a Jade West here?" said the man.
"Yeah. That's me." Jade hastily stood up and ran over to him.
"Awesome. I'm Bryan, the producer. Come on in." They stepped inside the office. It was very professional-looking, with clean white walls, a single window outlooking the city street, and a wooden desk. The desk was currently occupied by three people. One was Bryan, the producer. Another was a lady with short brown hair, pale skin, wide brown eyes, and a friendly smile. She seemed just like Cat, with a colorful striped dress and a playful personality. The third seat was occupied by a dark-haired, very tired-looking man, who must have been Mr. Belmonte, the director.
"Hi. Are you Jade West?" asked the lady in the middle.
"Y-yes. Yes, I am." Jade stuttered.
"Welcome to Northtail! I'm Darcey. I'm extras coordinator and I help with casting." she said. "Now, all you need to do is read the highlighted lines. I'm reading the other ones. If we don't immediately dismiss you, you can wait right through that door. Are you ready?"
"Yes." Jade said stiffly. But in her head, she was shaking her head like mad. -Faith-
Chapter 15 (I changed my mind. Chapter 14 won't have two parts!)
Jade was thinking of revenge, and nothing else. Well, almost nothing.
Abby deserves this, she told herself.
But what did she ever do to you? asked another voice in her head.
She completely forgot about our friendship. She was always smarter than me, more talented, prettier.
But she was nice to you. And you believed Payton when she said Abby was a back-stabbing liar.
She blinked and looked around. Abby and Beck were chatting excitedly about something. Meagan was on her phone, as were Lia and Izzy, while Terra doodled absentmindedly on what looked like typed-up lyrics for a song. And Cami, the subsitute, was on the phone (The classroom one) in the corner. Suddenly, she hung up and turned towards the class.
"QUIET!" she yelled, and every single person in there jumped and turned around. "Jade, you have an early dismissal. He's waiting for you outside."
Jade's eyebrows knit in confusion. Who was "he"? And why was some guy taking her out of school? Next to her, however, Abby was grinning in a satisfied, "told you so" sort of way.
"Abby, go with her." Cami nodded, as if there was some secret code they shared. Probably, since they were related. Abby and Jade ran out the door.
"Abby, what the heck is going on?" she asked as soon as they left the classroom. Abby sighed.
"Seriously, Jade. Did you not even open the envelope?" she said.
Jade dug through her bag and pulled out an envelope. To her suprise, it was open. She had completely forgotten about Abby and the whole "audition" thing that she had given Jade... right before Jade had dumped soda all over Abby. Her stomach lurched. She still felt sorry.
Jade quickly read over the paper. It sounded as if she had an audition... for today... at eleven. Jade checked a clock on the wall. Sure enough, it was ten-thirty. The studio must be far away.
"Ah, you must be Jade." A man in a black suit was walking towards her. Abby seemed to have disappeared.
"Oh, that's right!" Jade blurted out before she could stop herself. "You're Abby's dad?"
The man nodded. "Right, Miss West." He took off his dark sunglasses to reveal piercingly green eyes. Looking at him closely, he looked about twenty years younger than he probably was, with shiny dark hair, unwrinkled, pale skin, and a broad smile. "If you read the letter, which you probably did, I'm taking you to an important audition at Northtail Studios that could probably decide your career. Here's what you'll do." At this point, they got to a large limo parked in front. The driver, an elderly-looking man with a mustache in a black suit, opened the door for her, and she stepped in.
"By the way, call me Mr. Feldings, or David, or whatever you like." the man told her. "Anyways, here's what you'll do. You'll wait in the lobby, they'll call your name, the director will tell you about the scene, and then you'll act it out. Simple as that."
A few minutes later, they arrived at the studio. It was a five-story, shiny silver building with the Northtail logo (a shooting star under the words "NORTHTAIL") on a cement sign near the door. Mr. Feldings ushered her through the glass doors and into the reception area. It was completely empty.
The secretary looked up as Jade and Mr. Feldings approached.
"Names?" she asked quietly, pushing her glasses up her nose as she stared at them with watery brown eyes.
"David Feldings, representing Jade West." Mr. Feldings replied, and the secretary typed the names in.
"Ah, an audition?" she grinned. "Cool. Just go down the hall on the right, the door marked 1A, Mr. Belmonte. And if anyone asks, tell them Fawn gave you permission. Have a nice day."
They hurried down the hall and arrived at said door. Jade pushed it open, bursting with excitement.
But that was before she saw the giant crowd of hopeful teenage girls.
This would be harder than she thought. -Faith-
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