My new fanfic. Enjoy! Here goes...
Chapter 1 (Sorry about any glitches with the question marks!)
Jade slammed the car door closed and stormed into school. "Hey, Jade! I was wondering about-"
"Buzz off, Vega." Jade replied flatly, and kept walking. "I was wondering about the new play? I heard the auditions were soon? when are they?? Tori continued. Sigh. ?They?re this Friday after school. Now leave.? Jade responded, and was just about to enter Sikowitz?s classroom when Sikowitz himself stopped her. ?Jade?? he started. ?Can you do me a favor??
?You have to.?
?Ugh, fine. What do you want??
?I need you to help a new girl around school. She?s already in the classroom, but here?s her schedule and her school photo from last year so you know what she looks like. She?s in all the same classes as you. Just help her around, will you?? He handed Jade a folded piece of paper and ran back into the room. Sighing, she sat down and unfolded the paper. Then she gasped. That face was familiar. She remembered now. The same curly blonde hair. The sparkling blue eyes. The signature sloping nose. Oh, yes, she remembered it well now. The arguments. The jealousy. The betrayal.
This was the face of her worst enemy.
The room practically exploded with gasps and shouts of anger.
Michelle's eyes were huge. "Wait, really?" she whispered. "But... Jade is so much better
Jade gave her a halfhearted smile. "No, it's fine. You'll do great." She pretended to be
happy, but on the inside, she was a swirling, chaotic mess of emotion. Sadness, anger,
shock, all clumped together.
Meanwhile, Angie was clenching her hands, looking positively murderous.
"That can't be right!" she exclaimed, stamping her pink sandaled-feet and glaring. "I
mean, look at her!" She guestured to Michelle in a very indignant and rude way. "She just
isn't right for the part!"
"Now," said Bryan loudly. "Calm down!" But no one listened. "QUIET!" he shouted, and the
room fell silent. "There are some other parts." Suddenly, everyone was looking up at him
expectantly. "The part of Molly, the friend who caused the whole thing, is going to be
played by Jade West."
The breath seemed to leave her lungs as Jade's insides leapt for joy. She'd be in the
movie after all.
"The part of Sammi, the enemy, will be played by Angela Lee." Angie smirked at the whole
room, twirling a neon pink streak that Jade hadn't noticed before around her finger. No
surprise there. She was perfect for the part.
"The part of the other friend, Bella, will be played by Carolyn Tailor." The girl with
the light brown hair and blonde highlights that Jade had seen go in before looked around
"Thank you to all who tried out. Will those four people please come by here before you
leave to pick up a schedule for the filming. First session starts tomorrow at eight in
the morning." said Darcy, and she went back through the door, followed by Bryan and Mr.
"Yay, yay, yay!" Jade and Michelle were hugging each other and jumping up and down.
They'd get to work on the movie together. Even Jade shocked herself, showing that much
kindness to someone else.
"Hey, can you pick me up tomorrow? I don't have a car and my parents can't drive me."
asked Michelle, and Jade nodded.
"Sure, but my mom is really weird, so be careful." she said.
They picked up their papers and were about to leave when out of the corner of her eye,
she saw Angie talking to Carolyn.
"That's strange." Jade murmured. "They're complete opposites."
"Whatever, Angie's probably not going to do anything." Michelle replied, and with that,
they parted ways, Michelle being walked out by her father, who looked oddly familiar to
Jade, and Jade meeting Mr. Feldings in the waiting area.
"So you got the part?" he asked.
Jade shook her head. "I got a part," she corrected. "It's sort of a minor thing."
"No part is minor. Be glad you got it." Mr. Feldings told her.
She and Mr. Feldings drove back to her house in the black limo. Jade couldn't wait to
tell her family.
"Wait," she said suspiciously. "How do you know where I live?"
Mr. Feldings smiled calmly at her. "I've driven Abby to enough sleepovers here to know
Jade shrugged. She'd forgotten just who he was related to.
When she burst through the door, her mother was reading the newspaper (As always), her
dad wasn't home yet (Which was just like him), and her twin brother Lucas was tossing a
baseball up and down. She hadn't told anyone about him because they would want to meet
him. And she didn't want them to meet, because Lucas was about the friendliest, most
likable person ever.
"Hey, Jade. Want to go play baseball?" he said, flicking the brim of the blue cap he was
wearing over his dark brown hair.
"Nope," Jade replied. "I have something to tell you guys." Everyone turned towards her.
"I... Well, I..." As she was speaking, someone burst through the door. At first, Jade
didn't recognize him, but then she gasped. It was someone she had never expected to see.
Ideas? Im seriously in love with the idea of this fanfic. It's so fulled with drama! You want fanfics that make people hooked to the story. You have that. 10 stars!
Grammer? Perfect. You are using many describing words which helps people feel inside the story or they can picture it in their mind clearly. Use more of that
Realistic? Yes. In fact, make in 4th grade i had an enemy named Shay and she tried to get revenge on me. Long story, lol! Anyway, it is very realistic, since this can happen to people in real life. Great for a fanfic, but a little fiction is good too. Use some of that.
Details? Like i said on Grammer, it's super detailed. 10 stars!
My Advice? Well, like i said on your other fanfic, your not posting chapters. You havent posted your last chapter in a few months. Of course, im not making you write a chapter but you know what i mean. You lose people when you dont write a chapter in awhile.
Otherwise, this fanfic is great. Your an excellent writer, Faith!
Abby's head spun. Of course, she had forgotten about that one day a long, long
time ago, when she had considered the possibility of being nice to Jade.
She regretted that now.
"I hope she fails." she muttered angrily.
"Guys, we're still in class! Abby, start with W!" Cami's slightly harsh voice
broke her out of her daydream.
"Wait, what were we talking about?" Abby asked, not even meaning to start her
sentence that way.
"Xylophones... weren't the subject, anyways." Beck strained to find a sentence
with the letter X.
"You know, we are the last two here." Abby tapped her chin.
"Zebras... weren't the subject either." Again, Beck struggled for a word.
"Absolutely right!" Abby exclaimed.
"But... what do we do now?" Beck asked her.
"Come on, you should know what..." said Abby.
"Don't really know." Beck replied.
"Even Jade would know." Abby laughed.
"Forget Jade, it's just us." said Beck.
"Get on with it." said Abby, shoving his shoulder.
"How about I tell you a secret?" Beck's voice dropped to a whisper.
"I'd like that." Abby straightened up and leaned in to listen.
"Just give me a minute." said Beck.
"Kangaroos are faster than you, unless you hurry up!" Abby snorted impatiently.
"Listen, I..." Beck stuttered.
"Maybe I can help you." Abby shrugged.
"No, I got it." Beck turned away.
"This is boring!" said a voice. Definetly Meagan's. "Get on with this!"
"Okay, well, what is it?" Abby asked.
"Please... go out with me on Saturday?" Beck said shyly.
"Quite nice of you, and of course I'll go!" Abby reached out to give Beck a hug. A
nice one. Meagan rolled her eyes.
"Right, then..." Beck blushed.
"So, now..." Abby also blushed.
"To Nozu? The sushi place?"
"Underappreciated restaurant it is, but okay." said Abby.
"Very nice." laughed Beck.
"What about a place I know?" Abby grinned.
"Xylophones are my favorite music, so will that music be playing?" said Beck.
"You're ridiculous! It's a nice restaurant that my aunt owns!" Abby nudged him
happily. She didn't care what Megan thought of her or Beck or anyone now.
"Zillion, million yes!" Beck laughed again.
"A ridiulous thing to say." said Abby.
"And class is over!" Cami cut into their talking. "Nice job guys!" Just after she
finished, the bell rang. The class left, chatting and even gossiping about what
had unfolded in front of their eyes during class.
Meagan brushed past Abby, knocking her aside. "You're dead, Crabby." she sneered.
"Oh, man." Abby muttered, after she had finished wobbling from the shove.
"It's okay, she's just mean like that." Beck grabbed her to steady her. But Abby was already worried. Now she had two people to be afraid of, Jade and Meagan. And she had no idea why.
How did you guys like that? It was mainly just a "filler" chapter, and it didn't have too much exciting information and stuff, but...
Jade felt like she was about to explode from nervousness.
She always dreamed about her big break, but never imagined she would feel like this. Anxious to the point of bursting, wringing her hands, broken out in a nervous sweat. She suffered in silence until Darcey, the extras coordinator, handed her a script.
"You ready?" she asked softly, with a sympathetic look in her eye. "Hey, you'll do great. It'll be fine."
"I guess." Jade replied shakily.
"And... action!" shouted Mr. Belmonte.
"'Bethany, wait!'" Darcey read from the script in a fake-worried voice. "'Please, come back!'"
"'No!'" Jade cried. "'Not after what you did to me!'"
"'It was an accident! I didn't mean to!'" said Darcey.
"'It was not. And we both know it.'" Jade glared at her feet, as per instructions by the script.
"'Really, it was! I promise!'" Darcey protested in a weak voice.
Jade held up her hand, as it said in the script, and tried to force as much emotion as she could. "'Save your breath. Your chance is already gone.'" And she turned away, choking out a surprisingly realistic sob as she did. She could really relate to this character.
The entire panel broke out in enthusiastic applause.
"The best I've seen yet! Congratulations, Miss West!" Mr. Belmonte shook her hand, then Brian and Darcey did the same. "Through that door, if you please." He gestured towards another door to their right. She stepped through into a cramped room filled with about fourteen or so girls, all wringing their hands nervously. She found Michelle in the room as soon as she entered. The two hugged and shrieked for joy.
"This is amazing! We're both through!" Michelle squealed happily. But Jade suddenly stopped. "What's wrong?" asked Michelle warily.
Jade grimaced. "You know there's only one part, right?" she said. The smile immediately vanished from Michelle's face.
"I hope you get it," she said seriously. "You deserve it."
"No, you do." Jade told her. "You'd be great for it.
They had just started to argue lightly when a tall, thin, model-like girl with jet-black hair and almond shaped eyes tapped Jade on the shoulder.
"Hey, guys, you better stop arguing, because neither of you are going to get it." she snapped. "The name's Angela Lee. Call me Angie. You'll never stand a chance." she assured them confidently.
"Well, we're about to find out." said Jade wearily, as Brian, Darcey, and Mr. Belmonte entered the room, which silenced immediately.
"Let me just say, you all were amazing!" said Brian kindly. "But there was only one main part." At that part, the black-haired girl, Angie, smirked at them. "Congratulations to you all for making it this far. But the part definitely had to go to..."
Sorry for the short chapter. By the way, there's a huge twist on who gets the part that you guys will definitely not expect! Hope you guys like this chapter!
"I thought this was a private interview?" Jade exclaimed. "Why are all these people here?"
"I guess Mr. Belmonte must have, ah... changed his mind." Mr. Feldings said calmly. "It won't be a long wait."
"It won't be?" Jade muttered, but sat down anyways next to a short girl with wispy blonde hair and light blue eyes. She reminded Jade of a blonde mouse.
"No, Ally!" the girl whispered into her phone. "I'm sorry, okay? I'm taking a chance! It's more important than that thing, anyways!" She sniffled. "Please?... Okay, then. Fine. Have it your way." She hung up angrily.
"I know how you feel," Jade told her. "Same thing happened to me awhile ago."
"Really?" the girl asked. "By the way, I'm Michelle."
"Jade." Jade stuck out her hand, and Michelle shook it. "And you'll find that if she doesn't support you, she's not a good friend."
"Yeah, that's true. Thanks." Michelle smiled faintly.
A tall man with bright red hair wearing a black t-shirt was standing by an office door holding a clipboard. He said something, and a short girl with dark hair stood up. Five minutes later, she walked out looking disappointed. Jade realized he was calling names.
"Tailor, Carolyn!" he called. A girl with dark blonde hair stood nervously and shuffled into the office.
"So where do you go to school?" Jade asked Michelle. Both of them had bored looks on their faces.
"Oh, Hollywood Arts." Michelle replied.
"No way! Me too!" Jade grinned.
Michelle grinned back. "I'm there for music and acting. Not much of a singer. You?"
"Acting and singing." said Jade. "So, do you have Sikowitz?"
"I do. Isn't he so crazy?"
"I know right? I mean, coconuts? Seriously?"
Michelle laughed. "So when do you have him?"
"First thing in the morning." Jade answered. "You?"
"Right before we leave."
"Cool." said Jade. "You might know Andre Harris. He does some music stuff too."
"Oh, yeah, I know him!" Michelle nodded. "He's in my Music and Song-writing classes." She looked up as the man called "Wade, Hadley."
"I'm next." she said. And sure enough, a few minutes later, the man called "Wagner, Michelle."
"Good luck!" Jade said.
"Thanks, you too!" Michelle smiled. "See you at school."
As the time ticked on, Jade sat in silence, processing the new information. Now that she thought about it, she has seen Michelle walking in the halls and at her locker when school ended.
She jumped as she heard her name being called.
"Is there a Jade West here?" said the man.
"Yeah. That's me." Jade hastily stood up and ran over to him.
"Awesome. I'm Bryan, the producer. Come on in." They stepped inside the office. It was very professional-looking, with clean white walls, a single window outlooking the city street, and a wooden desk. The desk was currently occupied by three people. One was Bryan, the producer. Another was a lady with short brown hair, pale skin, wide brown eyes, and a friendly smile. She seemed just like Cat, with a colorful striped dress and a playful personality. The third seat was occupied by a dark-haired, very tired-looking man, who must have been Mr. Belmonte, the director.
"Hi. Are you Jade West?" asked the lady in the middle.
"Y-yes. Yes, I am." Jade stuttered.
"Welcome to Northtail! I'm Darcey. I'm extras coordinator and I help with casting." she said. "Now, all you need to do is read the highlighted lines. I'm reading the other ones. If we don't immediately dismiss you, you can wait right through that door. Are you ready?"
"Yes." Jade said stiffly. But in her head, she was shaking her head like mad.