hello out there well I know it?s a little oh who am I kidding a lot early to be starting a story but I am and well it would mean the world to me if you can to review and try maybe to stick with the story plz well anyway here the first chapter
CHAPTER ONE Morgan Winchester
The new girl?s pov
I walk through the doors of my new school and see kids everywhere. my heart is racing in my chest its 3 weeks in to the year and it?s my first day, I should be used to this by now I knew I wouldn?t be here long I was never at any school long due to my.... secret but never mind that now I started walking to the prinsable office .I knock on the door come in I hear him yell I slowly open the door I see a little old man sitting at his desk ah he said you must be the new student Morgan Winchester is it yes I say good now here is your schedule now run along he says while handing me a pieces of paper and shoves me out the door but I say in a light of protest no buts he half yells and slams the door in my face nice guy I muter to myself a look at my schedule home room reading writing social studies math lunch free period then science at the top of my schedule is my locker number 423 I say to myself I follow the string of lockers then the hairs on the back of my neck stand on end something?s wrong
So that?s the first chapter what do you think I enjoy feedback just try not to yell at me well anyway plz review so peace out ??. oh and what do you think of the plot and whoever can guess Morgan secret first gets a bubby request you don?t have to accept but you know the offer was there well byb
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Troy?s pov
We already met I told gia then I head a beeping signaling us it was time to go we all bolted out before Morgan could reply when we arrived at the command center gosai looked worried what?s a matter gosai you look upset is something wrong Emma asked I feel a power distress in the area ,aliens Jake said as he pounded his fist in his hand. no this ?..this is different all jumbled in a manner so that I can?t tell where the exact source is coming from he said with a puzzling look on his face (he has a face right) at that moment the alarm went off on no rangers tinsel yelling while he rolled around the room in a panic don?t worry we got this I said and with a confirming nod with the other rangers we all yell GO GO MEGA FORCE instantly we changed into our ranger form and teleported to the scene when we got there all was quit a little to quit well where is the alien Jake asked looking around ready to pull out his weapon at a moment?s notice then BAM Noah went flying into a brick wall across the street NOAH we all screamed we all ran over to him you all right bubby Jake asked while he offered his hand to help Noah up Noah groaned in pain peachy he said as he accepted the hand and was then pulled to his feet what was that gia ask who had pulled her weapon out and was pointing it in different directions every few seconds I don?t know I said then gia and Jake went flying in one dictions Noah and Emma in another and there I stood waving my weapon around like a blind bat then I went flying backwards into a big oak tree the blow knocked the wind out of me I clutched my chest in pain and I slid down the truck of the tree and I felt huge pressure on my body I tried to call out for help but the air wouldn?t leave my lungs and I demorphed
Emma pov
Troy I screamed as flew back into a tree I then saw out of the corner of my eye a black shadow or mass coming toward me I swung me weapon at it I gasped it went right though it I tried to kick it but my foot went though it just as my weapon had the black mass seemed to get darker and I swore I thought for a second I saw glowing yellow eye but then it though me back into the tree where troy was and I felt weight all over my body I felt the weight increase and could barely breath I was waiting for the darkness to sweep over me but it just wouldn?t come ,it just wouldn?t come then I felt 3 more body?s slam un into the tree I knew that it was Noah, gia , and Jake then all of a sudden the weight just stopped and the world went black
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Part 2, I hope Part 1 is post or this part will seem really weird. But if it doesn?t what I am trying to say is The plot to your story is very good and judging by the fact that her last name is Winchester and she has a brother named Sam this is also a Supernatural crossover. But you?re spelling needs work maybe try type it out in a word document first. You also need to work on spacing, detail, and grammar because it`s kind of hard to read like it is now. It should look something more like this:
?Now class, today we will be watching an amazing movie on whales and there will be a work sheet for you to fill out during the video, so no falling asleep or not watching.? Mr. Burley said
But I couldn?t focus I heard the video click on and felt someone hand me the worksheet but my head was getting worse it was hurting me. So I laid my head down on the desk and must have fallen asleep.
I dreamed of five people in colorful spandex, I tried to get a closer look at them but before I had the chance it flickered to nothing and then I saw my two brothers Sam and Blake at our motel Sam was having one of his flipping out moments and Blake was trying to calm him down then the imaged changed again it was the one thing that scared me the most it was coming toward me I couldn?t take it not again no, no, not again . I felt someone shaking me and I was pulled out of the dream.
I woke up to the boy in the desk next to mine shaking my awake.
?Are you ok?? he asked me, I could tell that he was sincerely worried
?I`m fine? I whispered over to him ?just tried, I?m Morgan Winchester by the way?
?I know? I mean Mr. Burley said it in front of class when we started? he whispered stumbling on his words trying to recover from sounding weird ?I`m Troy Burrows, I new here too.?
I raised my hand slightly giggling at the flustered boy
?Yes, Morgan? Mr. Burley asked not turning much from the screen trying not to miss any of the movie
?May I go to the bathroom?? I asked getting stares from bored teenager around the room
?Yes, yes take the pass but come back as quickly as you can.? He said sternly, as walked over taking the hall pass from him.
I rushed in to the bathroom; luckily no one else was there. I walked over to the sinks and splashed water on to my face. When I looked up I thought I saw that monster, I quickly turned around nobody was there, never again. I quickly dried my face off, no longer wanting to be alone and I rushed back to class. I walked in as the credits were rolling. Mr. Burley gave us the rest of class to talk about how amazing the movie was to each other but of course no one talked about it. Out of the corner of my eye I watched as Troy and the four of his friend were trying to sneak out the back classroom door. I quickly made my way over to them.
?Hey? I said making them all jump
?Hey Morgan? Troy said letting out a hint of relief
?Where are you guys going? I asked hoping they take me with them.
The curly blonde headed girl quickly jumped in ?Mr. Burley asked us to run an eran for him.?
She was clearly lying as Mr. Burley hadn?t gotten off his computer since he gave us time to discuss the movie. ?Umm ok, I?m Morgan? I said reach out my hand from the girl to shake it
?Gia Moran? she said shaking my hand ?and that`s Emma Goodall? she said pointing to the girl wearing a pink blouse. ?That`s Noah Carver? pointing to the teen with the blue jacket and the glasses. ?that`s Jake Holling? pointing to the boy in the black soccer sweat shirt. ?And you of course already know Troy.? I heard little beeps come from all of their pockets.
?We have to go? Troy mumbled
?As Troy said we have to go, see you around Morgan.? Gia said chasing after the rest of them as they had already run off as Gia was talking to me, they were all gone before I could even ask them where they were going.
I not trying to be rude or anything but I just thought I show you what I was talking about. Also if you like writing fan fictions you should try fanfiction.net in the Power Rangers and Supernatural crossover section.
Part 1
The plot to your story is very good and judging by the fact that her last name is Winchester and she has a brother named Sam this is also a Supernatural crossover. But you?re spelling needs work maybe try typing it out in a word document first. You also need to work on spacing, detail, and grammar because it`s kind of hard to read like it is now. It should look something more like this:
I walked through the doors of my new school. Everyone around stared picking me out as new student right away, without even think twice. This is nothing new; really I should be use to it by now, but yet I could still feel my heart racing. It`s 3 weeks in to the school year and it is my first day. I won?t be here long because of my secret, but let?s not talk about that right now. I walked into the office where the perky receptionist, directed my to the principals offices. I softly knocked on the door, I hoped that he won?t be in there and I could just ditch, and get one more day of freedom in. but through the door I could hear him yell to come in. I sighted opening the door slowly. I quick took in my surroundings, it was your typical high school principle office and at the desk was a little old man shuffling some papers.
?You must be the new student? he said not look up from his pile of papers; I took it as an invitation to sit in the seat that faced his desk.
?Morgan Winchester? I said conforming his accusation, he rolled over to a metal cabinet opening the drawer with key. He pulled out a manila folder with my name printed on it. And pulled out a small packed of papers.
?Now this has your schedule, your locker number and combination, some more paper your parents need to fill out, I expect them to be on my desk promptly at 8 am tomorrow morning and a map of the school.? He said making little effort to make eye contact with me. He sat up for his chair and walked me to the door.
?Have a nice first day Miss Winchester; don?t let me see you in this office again while you?re here.? He said pretty much slamming the door on my face.
?Such a nice guy? I muttered under my breath as walked pasted the receptionist and out in to the halls.
I looked down at the packed of papers. On the front was my schedule freshly printed out, I scanned down it.
FIRST PERIOD: BIOLOGY, MR. BURLEY, ROOM 116, 8:30 TO 9:35
SECOND PERIOD: ENGLISH, MRS. BERRY, ROOM 208, 9:40 TO 10:45
THIRD PERIOD: ALGEBRA 2, MR. WHITE, ROOM 134, 10:50 TO 11:50
FOURTH PERIOD: ART, MRS. LOVE, ROOM 189, 11:50 TO 1:20*
FIFTH PERIOD: FREE PERIOD, MRS. LOPEZ, LIBRARY, 1:25 TO 2:25
SIXTH PERIOD: A.P. U.S. HISTORY, MR. JONES, ROOM 206, 2:30 TO 3:30
*YOU WILL HAVE LUNCH AT SOME TIME DURING THIS CLASS DEPENDING ON THE ROOM. FIRST LUCH IS FROM 11:50 TO 12:15, SECOND LUCH IS FROM 12: 20 TO 12: 50, AND THRID LUCH IS FROM 12:55 TO 1:20.
I looked at the top right corner of the page where my locker number was located; it was number 423 combination 13-45-20. Then I felt it, the hairs on the back my neck stood up. Something was wrong.
I found my locker pretty easily but I did find that the school map was completely useless. I put in my combination quietly saying it to myself. The locker door swung open and I dumped all my books in to it taking out only what I needed for the next few classes, I left the school map in their too. I slammed the door shut as I crumbled to the floor groaning, the feeling I was having was getting worse, which meant only one thing. The warning bell rung as a picked myself up and hurried to class. I made it just as the final bell rang. I stood at the front of the room watching as all the other students filled in the seats. I hand the teacher the slip of paper I had to get all the teachers to sign to prove that I had shown up for class on my first day. ?Nice to meet you Miss Morgan? he said ?I?m of course Mr. Burley? hand me back the signed paper.
?Now class? he started ?this is our new student?.? He didn?t get to finish because five teenagers suddenly burst through the door.
?Nice of you five to finally join us? he voice booming ?I will see you five after class? they all quickly went to their seats. ?Now where was I... ahh...yes this is our new student Miss Morgan??.. Morgan? Morgan? he stuttered while snapping his fingers ?Winchester.? As he was introducing me I was getting really dizzy ?You may have a seat Morgan.? He said point to the last empty seat which was the desk next to one of the teens that had come in late. I lugged myself over and dropped into the seat.
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